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canoe

Resume

personal information

english name:jason
chinese name:guanfei
birthdate:14- Apr-1983

sex : male
birthplace: wu han , hu bei   education status : 3 years college degree
speciality:beer brewing
contact tel :13716791054
email Address:wjc_gf126.com  

education background

college：china-german beer institute Wuhan, hubei province，china

2002.6-2005.6  beer brewing

major in:Brewing water,malt produce,hops,physical and chemical analysis,microbiology,wort brewing,boiling,fermentation,beer filtering,beer bottling,professional calculation,professional english

practice training

2003.2-2003.9 China Resources Breweries (suzhou)Co., Ltd.

center laboratory QC
2004.2-2004.9 Inbev sedrin Breweries (putian)Co., Ltd.

beer filtering operator

2005.4
beer brewing senior skilled worker training

work experience

2005.5-2006.7  San Miguel Breweries (shunde)Co., Ltd  

brewing operator

working content:malt milling, rice mashing, malt mashing, lautering, wort boiling, hot trub ,wort coolling.

2006.7-2007.7
Kingway  Breweries(shantou)Co., Ltd

brewing leader

working content:wort oxidation operating,add yeast,fermenter tank temperature control, fermenter tank pressure control,yeast recovery,clean in place of Fermenter tank and bright beer tank.

2007.7-2008.12  Zhongbi Brewery (suzhou)Co., Ltd

brewing technician

working content:supervise implementation process,SOP program documentation,brewing process quality control.

2009.3-2010.3  Zhongde Equipment Co., LTD.shandong

after-sales service manager

working content:answer customer problems,equipment installation and commissioning,brewing technology personnel training,customer relationship maintenance.

2010.3--now: Weijiachuang Machinery & Electronices control technology(beijing) Co.,Ltd　

brewing engineer

working content:develop a small machine for home brew,responsible a part of sales work,technical support,equipment maintenance.

project experience

2009.4
plan a new process for zhongde equipment Co., LTD.Shandong and succeed

2009.8  using their own malt for produce beer succeed
2009.11  mini beer equipment installation for Jianghan University succeed

2010.3   develop a small machine of homebrew for beijing weijiachuang machinery & electronices control technology Co.,Ltd succeed

salary request
after tax 6000/month

米朵汀汀

brew beer

xiaoniu2103

just so so

jimmeyliu

,这职业,好狠阿

neo0619

The CV is a little bit ordinary, and some wording do not hit the point, eg. Sex shall be changed as Gender, working content shall be changed as working scope, etc.. And some "Chinglish" shall be changed as well. Hope it helps you.  

In addition, your salary expectation is far from the Wuhan compensation market media value, whcih shall be adjusted a little bit lower : )

CHENJIAN

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email Address:wjc_gf126.com  
有问题喔？掉了一个@
税后6000，在武汉吗？

zhangw

a-z的拼写均无错别字

canoe

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not in wuhan
in shanghai or beijing

neo0619

canoe 发表于 2010-12-12 08:43

                               
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not in wuhan

That's reasonable!